As a quick header for this Critique, I want to say that I see too many rude critiques in the MOCing community and some that are very pleasant but don't help at all. This is MOCing, not painting. You may add paint to the master piece. Therefore I believe our feedback should be memos that are like new and useful bricks. With legos, help build; don't break.
I have not seen any toy-robot style MOC yet, and this one will definitely leave me with a all around good vision of what they should look like.
I feel that, 3rdeye, captured what he was looking for in this MOC and while he did not follow some aspects of the vintage robot, this one still resembles one, none the less. Having some real '30s-'50s robots my self, I have a couple of things that kick in: bright colors, disproportionate bodies, and wonky or obscured faces. Like Robby or Robot liliput. However you did tip your hat to a lot of other fictional automatons, so I don't nit-pick too much.
As I said in the opening, Originality is complete, in my opinion.
I just have not seen one yet.
As always, 3rdeye88's MOCs have got to be O.K. in their builds at the least. While I have seen some that are not my personal style, I thoroughly enjoy his technique. Now, I have to try not to be partial so, like a man works hard to get the last bit of tooth-paste out of the tube, I must mark some things that can be improved... Ah O.K., the pipes on the side of the wrists jut out just a tad too far, in my opinion. Perhaps connecting them farther up the arms would help? And maybe some piston over the joints?
Not a meteoroid to my MOCing experience, but a worthy addition to both the BionicleMOCersleague and 3rdeye88's gallery. I hope I have been helpful in some distant form.
This is Kakama-King signing out.
P.S: Could you check out my new Pohatu revamp? I would find your feedback useful.
Gonna do things in reverse order a little bit. Read my latest journal about the Pohatu revamp. I did see it, it's in the BML gallery. I know its there. I glanced at it earlier today. Thought it was a tad weird looking, but I'll have to give it a proper study to give some worthwhile feedback.
Okay. I think you might be confusing a little bit of what I was going for. Think more like Retro modern robot and that's Grayskayl. He's not meant to be completely retro. Its all more of just a hat tip to those kinds of robots. Also, Grayskayl just kinda happened. There wasn't much planning, as opposed to the other MOC which I have given a lot of forthought, hence the poll I made. I was wondering how often MOCers plan things out, or just make it up as the go along. This was a *dumps out system parts* "okay, what should I do with this crap, well, I've got a lot of the grey colors, hmmm maybe a grey scale MOC." Then that came the gradient idea, and then it just turned into a retroish robot as I started building from the legs up.
I have to say I'm a little disappointed in where you rated impact and the complexity of this MOC, its mostly system parts with only a minor splash of bionicle for movement, but that chest is actually rather complex and was a total bitch to work with. I was hoping this would have more of an impact seeing as I'm really not a system MOCer, I hardly ever work with it. So this to me is a big accomplishment as a MOCer. It pushed my abilities of MOCing in a different area further. Before I felt like I got kinda luckish with Matteonette and Hyde, but this to me cements in my mind that if I want to build a figure out of system I can do it and it come out well. Now I just need to see if I can build other things in system. What things I have no idea, but I should definitely push myself as a system MOCer as well as bionicle/HF.
I understand what your getting at and I find the rating system a bit off. Believe me, I like this MOC a lot; but impact does not sum up the feeling I had after viewing it. And then with technique, I rated it in places where it could improve, not were it needed improvement.
Aren't those two kinda the same thing?
I dunno it just had a lot of impact on me, as I was building it. So the fact it had little impact on you was kind of disappointing. Maybe its just because I don't work with system much, so the fact I was able to pull it off this well using system has a profound impact on me.
To tell you the truth, I did not know you were pretty new to system MOCing, so that was a lack of discretion on my part. I should have let the personal accomplishment kick in, had I known.
Forgive my cynicism. (no sarcasm intended)
Hehe its alright. Well just look at my gallery. Do you see it over flowing with system MOCs, and the few that are in there, do they span any kind of conceptual gap? Not at all. I've managed to use sytem for Figure building, and for detailing on the Reta Sarka. As it was it took a day of *dumped out system parts* "well what the fuck am I gonna do with all this shit? " I use it in small amounts to detail my bionicle MOCs. The little parts(greebles) I can easily find a use for, but bigger stuff I'm at a loss for. As it is I've got this abundance of large system parts that'd probably be great for buildings or structures or who know's what that I'm still trying to wrap my head around using. You saw my journal with the picture of my system piles right?